Im 13 and written a little bit, i think it has potential...?

I will tell the truth,the beginning caught my attention and kept me reading.I LOVE the plot,it is different,and I have never seen it done in a book.I could keep reading,but you only have this up!Now to the criticism.If you learn to indent when you start a paragraph,it will look even better.And use some more capitols.'I' is capitalized,and use some commas before starting a conversation.I am currently working on a book off and on,and do excellent in English and Writing in school.So if you ever need any suggestions or help with your story,you can always contact me.